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TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:41 PM |
Hi im TaraBeckinsdale and im new on this forum. i joined to show u a Twiligth fanfic im writing. Now i now many of u may not like or hate Twilight but this story is almost as good as the original so u sould read it anyway.
---TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE---
---CHAPTER 1---
It was a rainy morning and still much dark outside when Tara Beckinsdale wok up. (Authors Note: U can see im sirius about this cuz i named mah username after the main cahracter!!) Tara went down to teh kithen 2 eat breakfast and saw her dad.
"dad why did we have to move to Forks! i hate it here it always rains! and i have no firends at school!" tara said.
"i got a job here so we had to move" he anwsered "besides im sure u will make lots of friends if u stop dressing like a goth"
"its called emo dad!!! why cant u ever understand me!!!" tara cried and ran to her room and skipped breakfast. she listened to depressing music by tokio hotel while she put on black clothes, black lipstick, black mascara and black eyeliner. then she went to school.
When tara came to school she heard some one shout "hey stupid emo girl!" she looked it was a bunch of girls dressed in pink an white. tara ignored them but they kept on shooting and then they pushed her so she fell in a pile of mud. tara startted to cry and the girls laughed at her but suddenly they stop and ran. tara looked up and saw a boy. he was pale like the moon an had golden hair like the sun and his skin could prolbaby shine liek a 1000 stars (but it didnt cuz it was cloudy outside.)
"Im edward." he said.
(AN: is the story good? plz tell me!) |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:42 PM |
| Twilight sucks silly vampire! |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:44 PM |
| even if u dont liek twilight you will like next chapter!! i promise |
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 MrN0306
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:44 PM |
I read it...
And then I laughed. |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:45 PM |
| SHUDDUP AND GET OUT OF HERE! |
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lukerafa
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:46 PM |
| The movie was good because I saw werewolves rip people's HEADS off. EPIC. |
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Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:46 PM |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:46 PM |
---CHAPTER 2---
"Im... im tara" tara gasped.
"let me help u" eward said and streched a hand at her. she took it and it was all pale and hard. tara gased again. with fantazic strngth ewdard pulled her out of the mud.
"thank u" tara gasped. she couldnt stop staring at edward cuz she had never seen a boy be so pretty.
edtard looked back at tara and deep within there eyes there hearts and brains and souls connected and they could only see each other.
But suddenly they heard an explosion! from teh parking lot. edward screamed "NOOOOO!!!" and ran. tara ran after him but he was fast like impossible.
At the parking lot it was horror. a car had crashed with teh school bus and caught explosion. A girl lied on the road all exploded. edward was next 2 her crying.
"BELLAAA!" he cryd. "why did i stop watching you!!" |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:47 PM |
| How do you catch explosion? |
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blobbem
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:47 PM |
*Grabs translator.*
*Scans page.*
*ERROR. Please ignore thread.* |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:47 PM |
| Stupid and boring like the real Twilight, but with bad spelling. |
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Yikole
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:48 PM |
| TWILIGHT FAN...TERMINATE |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:48 PM |
| THA ACTION HAPPENS TOO QUICKLY |
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Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:49 PM |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:52 PM |
| When I saw the cover of the first book I thought it was about apples. |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:53 PM |
| i now i dont always spell very good but im tryin to learn ok! |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:53 PM |
| When I saw the cover of the first book I wanted it to be about apples. |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:56 PM |
---CHAPTER 3---
edward was crying at teh corpse of bella. tara was near shcoked.
"who was she?" tara asked.
"bella was my gf and was evrything to me" eward said. "how can i live without her?!?!" he cryd.
"plz let me help u" tara said "like u helped me from teh evil girls."
"ok" said edard and he and tara went into teh school. evil gilrs stared at em but didnt dare to say anything cuz edward was tara tryd to console him and hug him and he stopped crying a litlte.
suddenly they met a big boy in the corridor. he looked almost like a wolf except was human now.
"hey edtard!" he said. "u are already getting a new girlfriend? lol"
"jacob..." edward said and and made hands into fists. |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 04:58 PM |
| I like it, just please fix your spelling and grammar. |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 05:02 PM |
*Loads Shotgun*
*Aims at all vampires*
TWILIGHT SHALL DIE IN FLAMES AND WILL BURN UNTIL IT IS OUT OF EXISTENCE. ANYONE WHO LIKES TWILIGHT SHOULD FIND SOMETHING MORE WORTH DOING THAN READING ABOUT THAT IDIOTIC CRAP.
*Sets fire to all copies of Twilight.* |
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Re: TWILIGHT: BREAKING TEH ECLIPSE
Posted: 06 Jul 2010 05:02 PM |
| Horrible.Nobody in the forums like twilight.You have no grammar,also its one of the rules of OT.ALWAYS USE FREAKING GRAMMAR. |
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